15 June 2011

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A Place and a Question

W Gi-and Q
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Welcome to this special edition of Word & Question! This month, I changed the rules a little: instead of submitting a word, all players had to submit the name of a place. That's to tie this monthly activity to my June Giveaway, which lets one lucky reader win a book from the Philippines. (Remember that if you're playing this game for points/entries, you must be linked up by 29 June!)

Speaking of giveaways, haiku wizard Vvb32 has her own special giveaway of a book by a Filipina writer! Link up your poem a second time on her Word and Question: Deadhorse post and get a chance to win Her Wild American Self by Evelina Galang. This offer is also open to anyone willing to compose a haiku using the prompts Vvb32 received in this game--and yes, it's international! =D

By the way, if you didn't get to read all the poems from last month's game, you can always go back to Very Sleepy People and get updated!

UPDATE: For more poetry, visit this week's Poem in Your Post Blog Hop. I've already linked up this post and hope you'll join us by linking up your own as well. =)

Word Place: Paris
Question: Can I have the keys?

There is no one driving my destiny
I'm making no time and I'm getting nowhere
The passenger seat empty next to me
Save for the spectre that goads me to go where
We loved and laughed and lost before:

The post-war Paris that is no more
The Renaissance Rome of Christian yore
The Troy more ancient than Homer's lore
Eden before sin closed the door . . .

I think I'll be keeping my keys with me
Thank you for asking, but please let's not go there.

Hmmmm. Are my poems getting depressing lately or what? I used to be much more playful than this. =/

What do you think of your own creative output these days? And would you say you're a good critic of your own writing?

Link up your poems and share your thoughts in the combox! I'll be happy to read them. =)

UPDATE 2: Links to the other poems, in order of submission . . .

Dylan -- vvb32 -- J -- Laurie -- Ellen --
Check back for more!

21 comments:

Sullivan McPig said...

I'm not getting anywhere with being creative at the moment. Must be the dampy weather over here.

I did write a haiku over at vvb's blog btw :-)
Not much of a haiku, but that's another story.

Your poem might be a bit gloomy, but it is beautiful.

dylan said...

It's not without a certain element of playfulness: quadruple rhyme, and ending with "let's not go there"!

As for my own effort this month, le voici.

Dauvit Balfour said...

I'm with dylan - melancholy tones don't make it sad, at least not to me. Then again, I didn't think my last poem was sad when I wrote it, but some did.

I love the quadruple rhyme, particularly the last line of that part.

I'll return with a poem soon, I hope. I've got a couplet already planned, I just have to fit it in to something grandiose and bombastic... or not.

Enbrethiliel said...

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Sully -- An extra point for you, then! ;-) Thanks for your kind words about my poem.

Dylan -- Come to think of it, I was alternately channeling and wrestling with the influence of Taylor Swift when I wrote this, and that's plenty playful. LOL!!!

Dauvit -- If I were to put this to music (not that I could), I wouldn't use a minor key--which is admission enough, I guess, that although I was feeling melancholy when I wrote it, the emotion didn't completely hijack the poem. Maybe I should grab Christine and try to turn this into a pop-rock ditty . . .

vvb32 reads said...

yes, depressing but beautiful with movement yet stagnation

i love this line - Eden before sin closed the door . . .

here's me: but you already read ;-D
http://vvb32reads.blogspot.com/2011/06/word-and-question-deadhorse.html

Enbrethiliel said...

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"Movement yet stagnation" is a great description, Vvb32! It's certainly what I was feeling while writing this!

But stagnation isn't very edifying, is it? If I'm ever in this emotional, creative place again, I hope to come up with something that leans closer to movement on the spectrum: wild, elemental movement!

Thanks for playing this month. =)

Laurie said...

Wow! Your facility at crafting beautiful poems through this puzzle-poem challenge just puts me to shame...I'm still working on mine, but I suspect it won't hold a candle to this intricately wrought, spot-on piece. And I agree with Dylan that the rhyme scheme offered a buoyancy to balance your perhaps more pessimistic theme.
And it looks to me like your twenties are rocking the creativity and connection! I'm interested in how you conceive "elemental movement" too...

Enbrethiliel said...

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Thank you, Laurie. =)

It's the bouncy bit in the middle that I love the most, too. I wish I could have spread out its wistful whimsy over the rest of the poem.

We'll see about that elemental movement next month! ;-)

Sidne,the BCR said...

hoping by from Poem in your Post. my first read of your poems, i dont write i post my favorites.

Enbrethiliel said...

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Thanks for returning the visit, Sidne. =) Any time you feel like writing, you're welcome to join this game, too.

Coreena McBurnie said...

That is a beautiful poem, very touching. I really enjoyed reading it.
Coreena
http://coreenamcburnie.blogspot.com/2011/06/weekend-poem-blog-hop-recess.html

Enbrethiliel said...

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Thank you, Coreena! =) Your original poem was wonderful, too, so I hope any readers of my blog who didn't join Laurie's hop try your link and get to read it themselves.

J said...

'm definitely getting the melancholy vibe from your poem, but then, I can't say mine's any more positive (though distinctly more disgruntled). Like the others, though, I distinctly enjoyed the quadruple line and the descriptions employed therein.

Enbrethiliel said...

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The quadruple rhymes are my favourite part as well. I think of them as the sun breaking through the clouds of the rest of the poem . . . only to be swallowed up again in the end. =/ Not my best poem, but I like seeing an alternative direction to the funky path I've been taking lately. With any luck (and grace!), my next poem will have more of what the quadruple rhymes have and less of my own emo issues.

Thanks for playing again this month, J! =)

Laurie said...

Whew! I finally got my poem done. And I am so glad I joined your challenge here, E. It has definitely gotten me hooked on writing poetry again!
Here's my Aotearoa poem at http://whatsheread.blogspot.com/2011/06/war-and-peace-and-poem-about-new.html
Hope y'all enjoy it!

Enbrethiliel said...

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I'm so glad to read that, Laurie! =D I guess this means we can expect you to join the game next month as well? (Say yes!!!)

Laurie said...

FYI: I tried to post a comment to Dylan's poem, but couldn't sign in to Wordpress and don't want to sign in via FB or Twitter. How does one sign in via Wordpress? Does anyone know?

Enbrethiliel said...

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I got a Wordpress account just for commenting last year, before I had my Twitter. It's easy and quick to sign up, and you don't have to be saddled with a WP blog if you don't want one.

Click here, Laurie! =)

I hope it's not too much of a hassle! I know Dylan would appreciate your comment very much.

Salome Ellen said...

Whew! Made it in just under the wire. http://salomeellen.blogspot.com/2011/06/word-place-and-question-13.html

Comments here and elsewhere will come later......

Salome Ellen said...

Hey! It was still June 29th where I am! ;-D

Anyway, I like this effort, and I would deem it "wistful" rather than "gloomy." It made me think of a number of places that are no longer available to me, and I will definitely argue that it is better to have loved and lost them than to never have been there. But trying to live there would be a mistake.

Enbrethiliel said...

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Thanks, Ellen. =) I think you found in the poem what I was trying so hard to put into it. Now if I could only get from knowing that living in a lost past is a mistake to knowing what to do in the present that is still available to me.

And of course you're getting the extra entries in the June Giveaway! =D